From: Ben Aveling <bena.001@optusnet.com.au>
Date: Mon, 26 May 2014 08:11:43 GMT
Subject: Re: [PATCH] wording fixes in the user manual and glossary
Message-ID: <5382F73F.2010704@optusnet.com.au>
In-Reply-To: <5382F237.8070909@gmail.com>

On 25/05/14 20:37, Jeremiah Mahler wrote:
>> How about this:
>>
>>    Eventually the upstream developer will do additional work in their
>>    repository.  Creating new commits and advancing the branches to point
>>    at the new commits.
>

The second sentence needs a verb.  Maybe something along the lines of 
"When they ${do_X}, ${Y} will happen" ?

Regards, Ben